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Первый день весны

A he was July 1945 — first day Spring. And a fresh wind pute in raspakhnutoe window. The clean the sky realizing innocence polygons cities, who was playing along on the sun snow — providing imparting whiteness.
"About than further write, about than conceive in day, when nature revives? Of course about love! Only about it, to it, for it. And still can be about light of. And poets and gurus live, musicians, couples — all value this time year. Winter of plummeting has, remained its the shadows. Snow familiar from crystal.
Has come the first March.
Sunday. Sunny. Fresh. It's a bit frosty. The revival.
In such a weather want gulyat with favorite a, has improved greatly for hands, and even more look in window on Endless light and was blue the sky. Seems moment valuation and actions not will.
But clock ticking. All is changing — will come night, will ignite fires of. Gold sun lose silver Moon Illusion. And until — noon, equilibrium: And in psyche, and in nature. "
Point reliance was alternatives. Alex made record in diary and, amazing from-for the table, became aggregate in a path.
Early morning and weekend, seemed all commands to rest. Activist or sozertsatelnomu, But on fact, far shelter itself from concerns? If you not Alexander developer WorldForge, then vanity gets and in output. Why they fell in these sporadic holidays precisely spring? Could would the summer will go in exotic countries type Thailand’s or, even better in the country Russia. But there is no, raze — now or never. Call in Eastern Europe, where what good there is pianism cave with paranormal properties. If would not World he would nor for that not agreed on this tour. But she with relish, arrived, not even corrupted enthusiasm come around. In school would still quarantine — two weeks all are free.
Now, when Alex the first came in airport and sat in spied a expectations, him remained only monetize growing discontent in game words. Music he firmly decided to start to hear only in jet.
Gathered all belatedly: Irwin got lost on away to aerovokzalu, Max, as usually, fundamentally not hurried. Of light and Andrei came meal for, and they threesome typically recognized snack in lifetime at the second floor airport.
When Max with bland guise of joined their companies, and Irwin through minute collapsed in free chair in spied a and check in, although with open verkhotury his and so is famously noticed still on emotional outburst during hit announcement:
"Respected passengers! In ties with no-fly weather flights "Bilgorod — Budapest" and "Bilgorod — Prague" being postponed indefinitely. Would bring sincere apology. We do all possible for popadayuschikh of mending situation. "
— How? Why?
Of light leapt up, jumped so, that chair, for whom she sat, fell on gender.
— Yes volcano this Icelandic has awakened, again, — winced Max. — Well, the coming clock not'll fly away.
— A let us bus rounds! Will rent tickets and blow our EMP nalegke, — proposed Andrei, which liked find exit from the deserts unmanageable situations and was I've been seconded parent route committee in as a maintainer, so as him already founding eighteen.
"Ox, as I not love to change plans", — thought Alex.
But most voted for the surrender ticket. One Max, naturally, kochevryazhilsya, but brief: Had crumbled almost without battlefield.
— A and shall save, — cheered Irwin, — in country crisis brewing.
— Yes crisis goes rush,! — exploded Max. — you that, in stores not spend much time?
Of light notorious smiled. She was very good, and still, very lucky win educational tour in Hungary not everyone manages. And here quarantine: Dash: Lucky is obtained them all. Unfortunately, good heart of not promotes public popularity in our days — had to to invite to take boys, have Svetki not was girlfriends, except one girls — it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. In general, girl she an honest not without idefiks in anybody, but ????? must be dream. Even strange, that Alex fell in love in it. Him constantly seemed that feelings, covered most his're unbelievable dream, that such world, even slightly a strange in his positive sineglazka not for him, but glance deflecting could not and to abandon trip, too, not managed to.
"She warrior will tear apart me soul on tens of small little scraps, and they's news will have spread on shit up universe", — often thought Alex, even when they sat near on classes. For one front of a blackboard with first class — so must was called this syndrome — setting friendship many years.
This winter feelings have frozen. Alex almost calmed down. First day — the first present adventure and test feelings.
Alexey very feared admit and so decided to minimally communicate with perfect. Life as always all has upended with heads back on its feet. In bus ride they proved on neighboring places. Deviating was extremely suspicious so much years for one front of a blackboard sit yes and could be perceived as humiliation.
So, two were headphones, Alex immediately are you staring at in window.
"How many time flowing until wide day, how many kilometers moonlit NEFAZ until light shines over world? Until Hungary accurately not gonna make it. Until Ukraine. "
Through poluson, R & B and modern life music fought their way cries:
— their we have no. Us same will be dropped!
Together with vague rapt something grokhnulos. Team bus embarked.
— Klass, mad shift away! — voice Max acquiring professionally-spitefuI fruits with.
Team bus has.
Of light crying on were marginalized, in metres three hundred stood dymyaschiy NEFAZ, mood have all was it's a lousy.
— A that we so tend? A ride'll catch, we finish dinner until borders there. — Andrei not managed to end as his disabled telecom, simplex, Max:
— Moldavia had stolen, as we border shall cross?! The first March — today Ukraine imposed ban on entry for domestic.
— a ride'll catch, a ride until Hungary? — suddenly exploded already Alex.
— What Ukraine, Belarus in five hours path.

***

— Greetings! Veronica, as you here.
Girl and Andrei zhemanno The mayor of New Springfield one a kiss in cheek.
In three o they proved have closest Belarusian the TRC.
Despite doubts, Andrei as something took their in further movement — already to border Belarus and here is, now still and found familiar, as he himself put it "on Skype."
— Andrew, is happy to see, what Faith you works on border of last dictatorship Europe?
— Destino? — Andrei inherited an economic. — No, daughter podruzh. Good old hat won educational tour in Budapest and here is, clear cutting chain nevezeniy: We have no their, tour already translated vizovo-academic.
— The poor little ones. Listen, and have us on military jet OSCE seats many, — girl cunningly smiled. — Only as. Getting you out, but if you skillful extreme snowboarders.
— We — Russians: Without sports — nowhere.
Jet, and truth proved spacious, flew quickly. Andrei and Veronica could not Registan from each other and on happy eyes girls not it is difficult was be guessing where about its regard. Andrei melt soon in rays this magneticheskogo glance and gradually forget himself. By the end of by air our guide terminally melted and nesmelo addressed our group:
— Guys, I perhaps you'll leave, in the Czech Republic have Veronika problems, and Hungary here minutes` until of Budapest, there embassy, you after all adults already.

***

To wane we already sat across in airport of Budapest. Red-Golden rays commentators the sky on its very special, but not this pleased its the Light:
— you represent cave just in some sixty kilometers to to southeastern! Less hours!
— Euro something have us not had stolen?!
— No, thank god, — drama voice Irwin.
Immediately with air terminal we took travel taxi. On highway, on speed above a hundred kilometers twilight would still were coming after us. Recent rays sun, recent paint decline of disappeared even before as we has scaled back on secondary a path. Here taxi became slip, but some as even before offensive night pulled up to governing-vast kempingu.
— Yes modicum erected tents with a not power, here Ischu, — been happy about Max, deconstructing from aaaaaeieea bags.
The sky darkened slowly, perhaps too sluggish, rather this force habits after a long winters: Bam and twilight, moment and night. Alex looked on clock, the switch showed almost seven.
— First day Spring. — he was smiling,’s World, she unlike rest went directly to prigorku, on which was headquartered cave. Many thousands of years ago in the array dangerous cliffs soft, docile, life-renewing water, istochiv granite from within, created these years, and now the Beautiful, a strange, youthful girl commanded in their darkness.
— Hey, you far?! — Alex not is sustained and members got the Light.
For him was reaching Max, next — Irwin.
Globe caught up with only have caves. She teetered, frozen, in paired steps from entry.
— Besstrastnoe, first day Spring, the sun still light up the the sky the latest rays, perhaps, although would somewhere there in space. Miracles.
Girl entered cave. Strange electric have some veering ahead, as if specifying path. They excellent very close spellbound by froze, viewing unknown phenomenon.
— you erected tents borrow chase? And the surrender forgotten, — in impeccable Russian was asked obey.
Seller from Campsite stood, zagorazhivaya entry. Max, turned around,, apparently take From left money and things. Gromykhnulo, a strange mist but / surrounding, Wall the whether Netanyahu, then whether was the. Their all five're being pulled by.
When Alex wake them, the rest came in themselves, World same teetered have Wall and something quietly hear from, as this girl's a robot.
— . This should not was be, Everyone differently. Will happen.
— What, that? — Max grapple were holding back, when seizing for shoulders down my old classmate, wasn that not was shaking down its as doll.
— Miracles. I she has dreamed help girlfriend who, Olga, after all in directory stated, that the water in this a cave curative, if to garner in first day Spring.
— That it as! — lost ground, as if opomnivshis, just yelled, Max.
— I she has dreamed help.
— . Here is why you fewer all us borrow — without of lasting guys not going to do is pass on paranormal a cave.
All as on team look on Irwin's, which as times adjusted the lens.
— And still such a smart-ass bring my slipper, — set them off hands Max.
— Nu you, its robust guy, tone open Gabay, loudness oneself, — khokhotnul seller.
Max choked for sure from indignation, but why something nothing not said, perhaps him simply lacked words. And can high, athletic, with a strong mournfully guy acted sedative functions.
Here slew still in several places to the surface goes. And guys hope shelled for alone, maximum, three days. This after all cleanest national meaning, pre-rounds here every day. Air enough, erected tents there is, water find, from hunger die not asking.
— A who pre-rounds makes, — Max quickly took themselves in hands.
— ya And still previous my.
—. Similarly, the? — suspicious squint Alex on seller of. The wanted to to answer, but his totally interrupted you World:
— 1425 should be source of, — she come to her senses girl, — first day, after all.
Guy from Campsite smiled.
— We today day polled, — held out he a small bubble. — When've been passed over, on you. Me Jaroslaw name is.
Of light pressed tare and’s:
— Thanks.

Исправленное 3.1

A he was July 1945 — first day Spring. And a fresh wind pute in raspakhnutoe window. The clean the sky realizing innocence polygons cities, who was playing along on the sun snow — providing imparting whiteness.
"About than further write, about than conceive in day, when nature revives? Of course about love! Only about it, to it, for it. And poets and gurus live, musicians, couples — all value this time year, after all largely it symbolizes triumph light feelings. Winter of plummeting has, remained its the shadows. Snow familiar from crystal.
Has come the first March.
Sunday. Sunny. Fresh. It's a bit frosty.
In such a weather want gulyat with favorite a, has improved greatly for hands, and even more — look in window on Endless light and was blue the sky. Seems, moment valuation, and actions not will.
But clock ticking. All is changing: Will come night, will ignite fires of. Gold sun lose silver Moon Illusion. And until — dawn, renewal: And in psyche, and in nature. "
Point reliance. Alex made record in diary and, amazing from-for the table, became aggregate in a path.
Early morning and weekend, seemed, possess to rest. Activist or sozertsatelnomu. But far shelter itself from concerns? If you not Alexander developer WorldForge, then vanity gets and in output. And where his bears in these sporadic spring demonstrated holidays? Could would the summer for Ban to go in exotic countries type Thailand’s or, even better, in the country Russia. But there is no, raze — now or never. Call in Eastern Europe, where, what good, there is pianism cave with paranormal properties. If would not World, he would nor for that not agreed on this tour. But she with relish, arrived, not even corrupted enthusiasm come around. In school would still quarantine — two weeks are free.
Now, when Alex the first came in airport and sat in spied a expectations, him remained only monetize growing discontent in game words. Music he firmly decided to start listen to only in jet.
Gathered all belatedly: Irwin got lost on away to aerovokzalu, Max, as usually, fundamentally not hurried. Of light and Andrei came meal for, and they threesome typically recognized snack in lifetime at the second floor airport.
When Max with bland guise of joined their companies, and Irwin through minute collapsed in free chair for neighboring table, hit announcement:
"Respected passengers! In ties with no-fly weather flights "Bilgorod — Budapest" and "Bilgorod — Prague" being postponed indefinitely. Would bring sincere apology. We do all possible for popadayuschikh of mending situation. "
— How? Why?
Of light leapt up, jumped so, that chair, on which she sat, fell on gender.
— Yes volcano this Icelandic has awakened, again, — winced Max. — Well, the coming clock not'll fly away.
— A let us bus rounds! Will rent tickets and blow our EMP nalegke, — proposed Andrei, which liked find exit from situations, the deserts unmanageable and was I've been seconded parent route committee in as a maintainer, so as him already founding eighteen.
"Ox, as I not love to change plans", — thought Alex.
But most voted for the surrender ticket. One Max kochevryazhilsya, but brief: Had crumbled almost without battlefield.
— A and shall save, — cheered Irwin, — in country crisis brewing.
— Yes crisis goes rush,! — exploded Max. — you that, in stores not spend much time?
Of light notorious smiled. Even strange, that Alex fell in love in it. Him constantly seemed, that feelings, covered most his — 're unbelievable dream, that such world, even slightly a strange in his positive sineglazka not for him, but glance deflecting could not and to abandon trip, too, not managed to. And as she won educational tour in Hungary? And here quarantine: Dash: Lucky is obtained them all. Have Svetki not was girlfriends, except it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. Had to to invite to take boys.
"She warrior will tear apart me soul on tens of small little scraps, and they's news will have spread on shit up universe", — often thought Alex, even when they sat near on classes. "For one front of a blackboard with first class" — so should was called this syndrome — but setting friendship prorastala in love.
This winter feelings have frozen. Alex almost calmed down. And here is, first day Spring — the first present adventure and test feelings.
Alexey very feared to issue themselves and so decided to minimally communicate with perfect. Life, as always, all has upended with heads back on its feet. In bus ride they proved on neighboring places. Deviating was extremely suspicious: So much years for one front of a blackboard sit, yes and could be perceived as humiliation.
So, two were headphones, Alex immediately are you staring at in window.
"How many time flowing until wide day, how many kilometers moonlit NEFAZ, until light shines over world? Until Hungary accurately not gonna make it. Until Ukraine. "
Through poluson and modern life music, fought their way cries:
— their we have no. Us same will be dropped!
Together with vague rapt something grokhnulos. Team bus embarked.
— Klass, mad shift away! — voice Max acquiring professionally-spitefuI fruits with.
Team bus has.
Of light crying on were marginalized, in meters away three hundred stood dymyaschiy NEFAZ, mood have all was it's a lousy.
— A that we so tend? A ride'll catch, we get there. — until borders there. — Andrei not managed to end, as his disabled telecom, simplex, Max:
— Moldavia had stolen, as we border shall cross?! The first March — today Ukraine imposed ban on entry for domestic.
— a ride'll catch, a ride until Hungary? — suddenly exploded already Alex.
— What Ukraine? Belarus in five hours path.

***

— Greetings!
— Veronica, as you here.
Girl and Andrei zhemanno The mayor of New Springfield one a kiss in cheek.
In three o they proved have closest Belarusian the TRC.
Despite doubts, Andrei as something took their in further movement — already to border Belarus. And now still and found familiar, as he himself put it "on Skype."
— Andrew, is happy to see, what Faith you works on border of last dictatorship Europe?
— Destino? — Andrei inherited an economic. — No, daughter good old hat won educational tour in Budapest and here is, clear cutting chain nevezeniy: We have no their, tour already translated vizovo-academic.
— The poor little ones. Listen, and have us on military jet OSCE seats many, — girl cunningly smiled. — Only as. Getting you out, but if you skillful extreme snowboarders.
— We — Russians: Without sports — nowhere.
Jet and truth proved spacious, flew quickly. Andrei and Veronica could not Registan from each other and, on happy eyes girls not it is difficult was be guessing where about its regard. Andrei melt soon in rays this magneticheskogo glance and gradually forget himself. By the end of by air our guide terminally melted and, nesmelo addressed us:
— Guys, I you'll leave, in the Czech Republic have Veronika problems, and Hungary already here, minutes` until of Budapest, there embassy, you after all adults already.

***

To wane we sat across in airport of Budapest. Red-Golden rays commentators the sky on-its very special, but not this pleased its the Light:
— you represent, cave just in some sixty kilometers to to southeastern! Less hours!
— Euro something have us not had stolen?!
— No, thank god, — drama voice Irwin.
Immediately with air terminal we took travel taxi. On highway, on speed above a hundred kilometers twilight would still were coming after us. Recent rays sun, recent paint decline of disappeared even before, as we has scaled back on secondary a path. Here taxi became slip, but some as, even before offensive night, pulled up to governing-vast kempingu.
— Yes modicum erected tents with a not power, here Ischu, — been happy about Max, deconstructing from aaaaaeieea bags.
The sky darkened slowly, perhaps too sluggish, but rather this force habits after a long winters: Bam — and twilight, moment — and night. Alex looked on clock, the switch showed almost seven.
— First day Spring. — he was smiling,’s World. She, unlike rest, went directly to prigorku, on which was headquartered cave. Many thousands of years ago, in the array dangerous cliffs soft, docile, life-renewing water, istochiv granite from within, created these years, and now the Beautiful, youthful girl commanded in their darkness.
— Hey, you far?! — Alex not is sustained and members got the Light.
For him was reaching Max, next — Irwin.
Globe caught up with only have the caves. She teetered, frozen, in paired steps from entry.
— Besstrastnoe, first day Spring, the sun still light up the the sky the latest rays, perhaps, although would somewhere there in space. There is. Miracles.
Girl entered cave. Strange electric have some veering ahead, as if specifying path. They excellent very close spellbound by froze, viewing unknown phenomenon.
— you erected tents borrow chase? And the surrender forgotten, — in impeccable Russian was asked obey.
Seller from Campsite stood have entry. Max At Chabysh 2005, apparently take From left money and things. Gromykhnulo, arose a strange mist, / surrounding their. Wall the whether Netanyahu, then whether was the. Their all five're being pulled by inward caves.
When Alex wake them, the rest already came in themselves, World same teetered have Wall and something quietly hear from, as this girl's a robot.
— . This should not was be, all differently. So should not be.
— What, that? — Max grapple were holding back, when seizing for shoulders down my old classmate, wasn that not was shaking down its as doll.
— Miracles. I she has dreamed help girlfriend who, Olga, after all in directory stated, that the water in this a cave curative, if to garner in first day Spring.
— That it as! — lost ground, as if opomnivshis, just yelled, Max.
— I she has dreamed help.
— . Here is why you fewer all us borrow — without of lasting guys not going to do is pass on paranormal a cave.
All as on team look on Irwin's, which as times adjusted the lens.
— And still such a smart-ass bring my slipper, — set them off hands Max.
— Nu you, its robust guy, tone open Gabay, loudness oneself, — khokhotnul seller.
Max choked for sure from indignation, but why something nothing not said, perhaps, him simply lacked words. And can high, athletic, with a strong mournfully guy acted sedative functions.
— Here slew still in several places to the surface goes. And guys hope shelled for alone, maximum, three days. This after all cleanest national meaning, pre-rounds here every day. Air enough, erected tents there is, water find, from hunger die not asking.
— A who pre-rounds makes, — Max quickly took themselves in hands.
— ya And still previous my.
—. Similarly, the? — suspicious squint Alex on seller of. The wanted to to answer, but his totally interrupted you World:
— 1425 should be source of, — she come to her senses girl, — first day, after all.
Guy from Campsite smiled.
— We today day polled, — held out he a small bubble. — When've been passed over, on you. Me Jaromir name is.
Of light pressed tare to breast and’s:
— Thanks.

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A he was July 1945 — first day Spring. And a fresh wind pute in raspakhnutoe window. The clean the sky realizing innocence polygons cities, who was playing along on the sun snow — providing imparting whiteness.
"Has come the first March.
Sunday. Sunny. Fresh. It's a bit frosty.
In such a weather would wish to walk with favorite a, holding for hands, and even more — look in window on Endless light and was blue the sky. Seems, moment valuation, and actions not will.
But clock ticking. All is changing: Will come night, will ignite fires of. Gold sun lose silver Moon Illusion. And until — dawn, renewal: And in psyche, and in nature. "
Point reliance. Alex made record in diary and, amazing from-for the table, became aggregate in a path.
Early morning and weekend, seemed, possess to rest. Activist or sozertsatelnomu. But far shelter itself from concerns? If you not Alexander developer WorldForge, then vanity gets and in output. And where his bears in these sporadic spring demonstrated holidays? Could would the summer for Ban to go in exotic countries type Thailand’s or, even better, in the country Russia. But there is no, raze — now or never. Call in Eastern Europe, where, what good, there is pianism cave with paranormal properties. If would not World, he would nor for that not agreed on this tour. But she with relish, arrived, not even corrupted enthusiasm come around. In school would still quarantine — two weeks are free.
Now, when Alex the first came in airport and sat in spied a expectations, him remained only monetize growing discontent in game words. Music he firmly decided to start listen to only in jet.
Gathered all belatedly: Irwin got lost on away to aerovokzalu, Max, as usually, fundamentally not hurried. Of light and Andrei came meal for, and they threesome typically recognized snack in lifetime at the second floor airport.
When Max with bland guise of joined their companies, and Irwin through minute collapsed in free chair for neighboring table, hit announcement:
"Respected passengers! In ties with no-fly weather flights "Bilgorod — Budapest" and "Bilgorod — Prague" being postponed indefinitely. Would bring sincere apology. We do all possible for popadayuschikh of mending situation. "
— How? Why?
Of light leapt up, jumped so, that chair, on which she sat, fell on gender.
— Yes volcano this Icelandic has awakened, again, — winced Max. — Well, the coming clock not'll fly away.
— A let us bus rounds! Will rent tickets and blow our EMP nalegke, — proposed Andrei, which liked find exit from situations, the deserts unmanageable and was I've been seconded parent route committee in as a maintainer, so as him already founding eighteen.
"Ox, as I not love to change plans", — thought Alex.
But most voted for the surrender ticket. One Max kochevryazhilsya, but brief: Had crumbled almost without battlefield.
— A and shall save, — cheered Irwin, — in country crisis brewing.
— Yes crisis goes rush,! — exploded Max. — you that, in stores not spend much time?
Of light notorious smiled. Even strange, that Alex fell in love in it. Him constantly seemed, that feelings, covered most his — 're unbelievable dream, that such world, even slightly a strange in his positive sineglazka not for him, but glance deflecting could not and to abandon trip, too, not managed to. And as she won educational tour in Hungary? And here quarantine: Dash: Lucky is obtained them all. Have Svetki not was girlfriends, except it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. Had to to invite to take boys.
"She warrior will tear apart me soul on tens of small little scraps, and they's news will have spread on shit up universe", — often thought Alex, even when they sat near on classes. "For one front of a blackboard with first class" — so should was called this syndrome — but setting friendship prorastala in love.
This winter feelings have frozen. Alex almost calmed down. And here is, first day Spring — the first present adventure and test feelings.
Alexey very feared to issue themselves and so decided to minimally communicate with perfect. Life, as always, all has upended with heads back on its feet. In bus ride they proved on neighboring places. Deviating was extremely suspicious: So much years for one front of a blackboard sit, yes and could be perceived as humiliation.
So, two were headphones, Alex immediately are you staring at in window.
"How many time flowing until wide day, how many kilometers moonlit NEFAZ, until light shines over world? Until Hungary accurately not gonna make it. Until Ukraine. "
Through poluson and modern life music, fought their way cries:
— their we have no. Us same will be dropped!
Together with vague rapt something grokhnulos. Team bus embarked.
— Klass, mad shift away! — voice Max acquiring professionally-spitefuI fruits with.
Team bus has.
Of light cried to were marginalized, in meters, 300 stood dymyaschiy NEFAZ, the mood all were a messed-.
— A that we so tend? A ride'll catch, we get there. — until borders there. — Andrei not managed to end, as his disabled telecom, simplex, Max:
— Moldavia had stolen, as we border shall cross?! The first March — today Ukraine imposed ban on entry for domestic.
— a ride'll catch, a ride until Hungary? — suddenly exploded already Alex.
— What Ukraine? Belarus in five hours path.

***

In three o they proved have closest Belarusian the TRC.
Despite doubts, Andrei as something took their in further movement — already to border Belarus. And now still and found familiar, as he himself put it "on Skype."
— Greetings!
— Veronica, as you here.
Girl and Andrei zhemanno The mayor of New Springfield one a kiss in cheek.
— Andrew, is happy to see, what Faith you works on border of last dictatorship Europe?
— Destino? — Andrei inherited an economic. — No, daughter good old hat won educational tour in Budapest and here is, clear cutting chain nevezeniy: We have no their, tour already translated vizovo-academic.
— The poor little ones. Listen, and have us on military jet OSCE seats many, — girl cunningly smiled. — Only as. Getting you out, but if you skillful extreme snowboarders.
— We — Russians: Without sports — nowhere.
Jet and truth proved spacious, flew quickly. Andrei and Veronica could not Registan from each other and, on happy eyes girls not it is difficult was be guessing where about its regard. Andrei melt soon in rays this magneticheskogo glance and gradually forget himself. By the end of by air our guide terminally melted and, nesmelo addressed us:
— Guys, I you'll leave, in the Czech Republic have Veronika problems, and Hungary already here, minutes` until of Budapest, there embassy, you after all adults already.

***

To wane sat across in airport of Budapest. Red-Golden rays commentators the sky on-its very special, but not this pleased its the Light:
— you represent, cave just in some sixty kilometers to to southeastern! Less hours!
— Euro something have us not had stolen?!
— No, thank god, — drama voice Irwin.
Immediately with air terminal took travel taxi. On highway, on speed above a hundred kilometers twilight would still were coming after their. Recent rays sun, recent paint decline of disappeared even before, as they has scaled back on secondary a path. Here taxi became slip, but some as, even before offensive night, pulled up to governing-vast kempingu.
— Yes modicum erected tents with a not power, here Ischu, — been happy about Max, deconstructing from aaaaaeieea bags.
The sky darkened slowly, perhaps too sluggish, but rather this force habits after a long winters: Bam — and twilight, moment — and night. Alex looked on clock, the switch showed almost seven.
— First day Spring. — he was smiling,’s World. She, unlike rest, went directly to prigorku, on which was headquartered cave. Many thousands of years ago, in the array dangerous cliffs soft, docile, life-renewing water, istochiv granite from within, created these years, and now the Beautiful, youthful girl commanded in their darkness.
— Hey, you far?! — Alex not is sustained and members got the Light.
For him was reaching Max, next — Irwin.
Globe caught up with only have caves. She teetered, frozen, in paired steps from entry.
— Besstrastnoe, first day Spring, the sun still light up the the sky the latest rays, perhaps, although would somewhere there in space. There is. Miracles.
Girl entered cave. Strange electric have some veering ahead, as if specifying path. They excellent very close spellbound by froze, viewing unknown phenomenon.
— you erected tents borrow chase? And the surrender forgotten, — in impeccable Russian was asked obey.
Seller from Campsite stood have entry. Max At Chabysh 2005, apparently take From left money and things. Gromykhnulo, arose a strange mist, / surrounding their. Wall the whether Netanyahu, then whether was the. Their all five're being pulled by inward the caves.
When Alex wake them, the rest already came in themselves, World same teetered have Wall and something quietly hear from, as this girl's a robot.
— . This should not was be, all differently. So should not be.
— What, that? — Max grapple were holding back, when seizing for shoulders down my old classmate, wasn that not was shaking down its as doll.
— Miracles. I she has dreamed help girlfriend who, Olga, after all in directory stated, that the water in this a cave curative, if to garner in first day Spring.
— That it as! — lost ground, as if opomnivshis, just yelled, Max.
— I she has dreamed help.
— . Here is why you fewer all us borrow — without of lasting guys not going to do is pass on paranormal a cave.
All as on team look on Irwin's, which as times adjusted the lens.
— And still such a smart-ass bring my slipper, — set them off hands Max.
— Nu you, its robust guy, tone open Gabay, loudness oneself, — khokhotnul seller.
Max choked for sure from indignation, but why something nothing not said, perhaps, him simply lacked words. And can high, athletic, with a strong mournfully guy acted sedative functions.
— Here slew still in several places to the surface goes. And guys hope shelled for alone, maximum, three days. This after all cleanest national meaning, pre-rounds here every day. Air enough, erected tents there is, water find, from hunger die not asking.
— A who pre-rounds makes, — Max quickly took themselves in hands.
— ya And still previous my.
—. Similarly, the? — suspicious squint Alex on seller of. The wanted to to answer, but his totally interrupted you World:
— 1425 should be source of, — she come to her senses girl, — first day, after all.
Guy from Campsite smiled.
— We today day polled, — held out he a small bubble. — When've been passed over, on you. Me Jaromir name is.
Of light pressed tare to breast and’s:
— Thanks.

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Lightning but quite near …
— Fine! Electric storm in a cave! Here and clouds be should not! Physically …
Until Max loudly and long was perturbed abnormal activity, Alex Wrapped head, trying to cope with nakhlynuvshimi trumps emotion.
Unattractiveness encased in of unintelligible a cave, they unearned luck now to in real hardcover. Who would have think, that all rumors and a new Chimera around this seats prove only faint part of truth?
Little moreover, that almost immediately under vysochennymi arches have become create cumulonimbus clouds, so still their slightly not med enormous, vykativshiysya familiar from movie pro Indiana Jones the boulder. After this Alexander and not has restrained its – reproached the Light. Now very mince.
Rain behaved, oblivious nor on complaints, nor on psychology. Water pribyvala. Slowly've crawled on pochernevshemu set new clouds. Such pace all their simply would wash away through several hours. Alexander, with breath,, broke little new ground glance with unthinkable downpour on schoolmates.
Max, a gloom and sgorbivshiysya, sat on neighboring boulder. Now all in it expressed protest and resentment.
Irwin I was busing lens. He always so did, when worried.
— A I like rain! — World, propelling to tucham hands, danced an on soggy and slope stone. Naturally, she fell down. In one the hop Jaromir proved near with a. Jump-dragged her up its on the boulder and took refuge on him himself. Not very far gromykhnulo.
Jaromir only smiled thy bosom so throbbing young girl, and she firmly curled up next to him. On slap girls was dripping water, so Tears not was in sight, but Alex was am confident: Of light cries.
— This is after all miracle! This …
— Miracle – this you! As at all this years explain? As we shall get out? – barked on the Light Max.
Suddenly to Max At Chabysh 2005 Jaromir.
— Yes-and … — held out he, if DocumentFragment on taste of every breath, every dreaded. On women you yelling good at counting, in this we already has learned. And proposals to evacuation our souls hence will?
— This is she has need ask! — specifying finger at on the Light, almost childhood has cried Maxim.
— The most unbelievable, that among Front forming in closed structure system! — natseplyaya lens on nose, whispers slid in a in conversation Irwin.
— So as same scientifically explain this a regrettable fact? – poluprezritelno he was smiling, asked Maxim have an expert.
— NO, — those same voice responded Irwin, — although I would could long to talk about geomagnitnoy anomalies.
Zipper again but, as would by agreeing with Him.
A resounding announced, the flow of of light and sense of the ease, unending of euphoria. Alex opened eyes. All around was it seems on fairy tale: Is dazzling Shines On everywhere, and over head rocky road-pink the sky, such striking, that seemed the numbers.
In the next moment the world has become gray. No the sky, only strange scraps cloud, yes a, violet color of, stelyaschiysya over heads.
“I died ”, — with somehow even eloquent sense of joy it occurs to Aleksander, until where something not breathed announced and, compressed, sound of distress:“ get up, get up, get up, get up. ” When he was able focus, before him appeared tear-stained face Schastlivy.
— I that, survived?
— Yes, thank god, — of the right answered girl.
— Yes, this notable rocks slightly not It's crushing you, — was met with stony silence side company registration 89063 Max. Face his like relaxed, but in the eyes of a friend, soaring rage – he with hard were holding back.
Alex shocked looked around: He was on place, when svalivshis slightly whether not them on head enormous the boulder smooth spherical forms, as if vykativshiysya from miniature films, med tent from which they with from Max poured literally only that. And now Max erupts – Alex accurately knew. He accurately mind this moment, slightly more two hours passed.
“I got a 10 ago in time ”
Max At Chabysh 2005 and now in focus watched on the Light – convener their round.
— So, and as us extricate?! — pointing to the boulder, fully-killing exit from caves, remonstrated. He. – Such and for week not'll dig up!
— Over-my here the old pirate mechanism there is. Times here all so patrol, – said him he was smiling Jaromir.
— You still tell: “here treasures'd been buried ”, — Max he launched mad right now, — This is too!
Yar’Adua got to become forward, covering girl, Max overlooking the this maneuver drifting in poluprezritelnoy smile:
— zhyttja, ah need to same, knight.
Fyrknuv, i?eyoaeu he withdrew. Alex, contrary: The entire took the trouble. Now Yar’Adua intends forward, will tell something has heroically uprekayuschee, rather sake of moreover, to say, and not because that with from Max have them chronic bargaining of: As by the morning – the so not can come to terms – and Alex, preempting moment, sits up and has cried:
— I know, we accurately find the exit!
All as on team turned out.
— You that, cites export permission? — give me the stink eye Maxim.
— No, simply I watched plan caves in Camping, there, on the wall map prove: I its remember, I have that is a phenomenal memory.
In the answer, Max only seems to have given up hand. And Jaromir suspicious squint on Alexa, but debate not became.
— Well! Far go?
— spent, — Alex showed on the opposite Passage. Last time they went quite in other side there, where company light, but Alex thought, that neissledovannuyu part of caves is worth test. He knew, that their awaits in left the corridor: Parade the lightning, unimaginable rain, and clouds, plug the entire rulebook, yes and as forget start light – then it looked, that detonated Neutrino bomb.
Now they went right.

I on narrow koridorchikam as last time not had to, and, when they comprised in the new spied a all was differently. A spacious, accurately this in computer game, hall find malakhitovo-black cliff. In the center of the settled down Pereyaslav huge tornado, which razvorachivalos around its axis. Veterki, whirlwinds smaller negligently and-That's playful, as dogs ain't getting any working to spin discussions, flowing behind tsiklopicheskoy hoppers.
In addition in spied a zametalis skee ball electric storm.
— “I don’t seems they living, — moaning the Irwin.
Iskryaschie balls have been moving so intelligent, as if this look yourself at shifting sand have some, not clots electricity.
In really non-CIS late rooms, on elevated position,, chernel Passage. The only, that were overcome on the way to him, except of dalliance-and clots electricity – gigantic funnel.
— So, I there not'm gonna go climb.
In this time Alex fully internally agreed with statement Max. And still his pricked sense of dangers, signaliziruyuschee about how, that need to immediately withdraw.
As if having this intention, Shercer rose in tens of times. Inexorably tornado had developed, retracting all in themselves. As if vacuum. Gloom Belarus all around. Alexander again opened eyes. He was in tent.
“So after all rocks …, and if push still before in time, before as they will rotate in cave. ”
A stray thought not managed pleasantly oformitsya in anybody, as Alexa from erected tents quickly gunmen slight hands. Through a moment, on tent raged enormous stumbling size of with two-storey house.
— kings! — not weathered Alex.
— I fool? I you life saved, – remonstrated. Max.
— Why?
— Why?! Yes have you roof goes to! That smoke, — condemning the voice, asked Max, — still remained?
Alex seems to have given up was hand, but then html and a delivered:
— Thanks, Max.
— Since you you owe us a: And a half, there is no, dvukhlitrovaya mirinda and SevenAP … and …
— And chips, — immediately agreed Alexander.
— What something you the in heat, then in the coldness is abandoning, — 've got that furrowed brow i?eyoaeu. – Don’t took ill? Yes have you their is ablaze!
By touching it until forehead Alexa improvizirovanno-at gesture, delivered Maxim.
Alexa indeed was shaking from the-the chills.
“there, transfers of in time table for health not pass ”, — thought Alex, determined.
The third narrow command this mission like, beckoning his with the outset, when they only proved in semi-darkness and came in themselves after meltdown. Now, Alex with hard protiskivalsya on him. Dark, almost busting loose corridor – in it accounted for move on are, but gradually became lighter. Finally, Alexander saw Shines On – it flowed from-for reverberates – and decisively moved forward. Through some time, before him created an enormous pole of light, outgoing directly in nowhere, in unknown.
“From fate not gonna leave, are you, there is no, should I, if return still before, we'll make it on time flee ”, — with this with the thought Alex and may in is dazzling Shines On. Grokhnulo, from post decoupled their oval an outbreak of.
Its feet buckled, and body lasted for, when Alexa suddenly are receiving a new reality – the world before eyes things got a little crazy. Alexander stood near prigorka, and World already on emotional outburst during in cave.
— World! – has cried Alex, assuming resilience.
Girl sharply the Government,, shoulders and Nimera its started to shake.
The world, as if life stopped there, suddenly has stopped for. In several seconds Alex ran, grabbed the Light and dragged from entry.
— Wait, this after all first day Spring?
— Yes … — she World, looking Aleksander directly in eyes.
— you after all polled on you? – asked he have podbegayuschego to them Jaromir, Duke of Bohemia.
— Yes.
— That, they have water. Water from source, don …
Announced. Squarely on emotional outburst during before them occurred the collapse.
— You feel lucky you, — despite the collapse, slowly delivered Jaromir.
— First day Spring all-???.

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They flew Kenyan government on a chartered flight, and Alex slowly forgotten the most all.
Almost the entire flight World, should be joyful, he was smiling, clutched in your hand some water begins bubble with water from source. Through nap, Alexander smiled at, looking on it. Seemed not was these mysterious, mysterious rural in a cave, and he simply on time ran to favorite young girl. On time …
“Then why oh why where you knew pro first day Spring? ”

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Call in Eastern Europe , where what good there ispianism a cave with paranormal properties. If would not World he wouldnor for that not agreed on this tour.
Him constantly seemed that feelings, covered most his (dashes)'re unbelievable dream
we finish dinneruntil borders there. — in sense we get there. — or we finish dinner this sandwich?
— here is in the allocations slovosochetaniyakh clearly signs lacks. And such seats in the text lack. Please. Correct. If himself zatrudnyaeshsya — is ready point to all troubled fragments.

On location--near train station are found excess words.
In school would still quarantine — two weeks allare free. (And if not all — this already not two weeks)
Have Svetki not was girlfriends, except onegirls— it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. (The so if trip. The understandable, that girl. And contradiction: If not was girlfriends, then without curiously except. Remaking would this phrase.)

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A he was July 1945 — first day Spring. And a fresh wind I'm blowing in raspakhnutoe window. The clean the sky realizing innocence polygons cities, who was playing along on the sun snow — providing imparting whiteness.
"About than further write, about than conceive in day, when nature revives? Of course about love! Only about it, to it, for it. And still can be about light of. And poets and gurus live, musicians, couples — all value this time year. Winter of plummeting has, remained its the shadows. Snow, familiar from crystal.
Has come 1 March.
Sunday. Sunny. Fresh. It's a bit frosty. The revival.
In such a weather want gulyat with favorite a, has improved greatly for hands, and even more look in window on Endless light and was blue the sky. Seems moment valuation and actions not will.
But clock ticking. All is changing — will come night, will ignite fires of. Gold sun lose silver Moon Illusion. And until — noon, equilibrium: And in psyche, and in nature. "
Point reliance was alternatives. Alex made record in diary and, amazing from-for the table, became aggregate in a path.
Early morning and weekend, seemed all commands to rest. Activist or sozertsatelnomu, But on fact, far shelter itself from concerns? If you not Alexander developer WorldForge, then vanity gets and in output. Why they fell in these sporadic holidays precisely spring? Could would the summer will go in exotic countries type Thailand’s or, even better in the country Russia. But there is no, raze — now or never. Call in Eastern Europe, where, what good, there is pianism cave with paranormal properties. If would not World, he would nor for that not agreed on this tour. But she with relish, arrived, not even corrupted enthusiasm come around. In school would still quarantine-two weeks are free.
Now, when Alex the first came in airport and sat in spied a expectations, him remained only monetize growing discontent in game words. Music he firmly decided to start listen to only in jet.
Gathered all belatedly: Irwin got lost on away to aerovokzalu, Max, as usually, fundamentally not hurried. Of light and Andrei came meal for, and they threesome typically recognized snack in lifetime at the second floor airport.
When Max with bland guise of joined their companies, and Irwin through minute collapsed in free chair for neighboring table, hit announcement:
"Respected passengers! In ties with no-fly weather flights "Bilgorod — Budapest" and "Bilgorod — Prague" being postponed indefinitely. Would bring sincere apology. We do all possible for popadayuschikh of mending situation. "
— How? Why?
Of light leapt up, jumped so, that chair, for whom she sat, fell on gender.
— Yes volcano this Icelandic has awakened, again, — winced Max. — Well, the coming clock not'll fly away.
— A let us bus rounds! Will rent tickets and blow our EMP nalegke, — proposed Andrei, which liked find exit from situations, the deserts unmanageable and was I've been seconded parent route committee in as a maintainer, so as him already founding eighteen.
"Ox, as I not love to change plans", — thought Alex.
But most voted for the surrender ticket. One Max, naturally, kochevryazhilsya, but brief: Had crumbled almost without battlefield.
— A and shall save, — cheered Irwin, — in country crisis brewing.
— Yes crisis goes rush,! — exploded Max. — you that, in stores not spend much time?
Of light notorious smiled. She was very good, and still, very lucky: Win educational tour in Hungary not everyone manages. And here quarantine: Dash: Lucky is obtained them all. Unfortunately, good heart of not promotes public popularity in our days — had to to invite to take boys, have Svetki not was girlfriends, except — it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. In general, girl she an honest not without idefiks in anybody, but ????? must be dream. Even strange, that Alex fell in love in it. Him constantly seemed, that feelings, covered most his — 're unbelievable dream, that such world, even slightly a strange in his positive sineglazka not for him, but glance deflecting could not and to abandon trip, too, not managed to.
"She warrior will tear apart me soul on tens of small little scraps, and they's news will have spread on shit up universe", — often thought Alex, even when they sat near on classes. "For one front of a blackboard with first class" — so should was called this syndrome — setting friendship many years.
This winter feelings have frozen. Alex almost calmed down. And here is, first day Spring — the first present adventure and test feelings.
Alexey very feared admit and so decided to minimally communicate with perfect. Life, as always, all has upended with heads back on its feet. In bus ride they proved on neighboring places. Deviating was extremely suspicious: So much years for one front of a blackboard sit yes and could be perceived as humiliation.
So, two were headphones, Alex immediately are you staring at in window.
"How many time flowing until wide day, how many kilometers moonlit NEFAZ, until light shines over world? Until Hungary accurately not gonna make it. Until Ukraine. "
Through poluson, R & B and modern life music fought their way cries:
— their we have no. Us same will be dropped!
Together with vague rapt something grokhnulos. Team bus embarked.
— Klass, mad shift away! — voice Max acquiring professionally-spitefuI fruits with.
Team bus has.
Of light crying on were marginalized, in metres three hundred stood dymyaschiy NEFAZ, mood have all was it's a lousy.
— A that we so tend? A ride'll catch, we get there. — until borders there. — Andrei not managed to end, as his disabled telecom, simplex, Max:
— Moldavia had stolen, as we border shall cross?! 1 March — today Ukraine imposed ban on entry for domestic.
— a ride'll catch, a ride until Hungary? — suddenly exploded already Alex.
— What Ukraine? Belarus in five hours path.

***

— Greetings! Veronica, as you here.
Girl and Andrei zhemanno The mayor of New Springfield one a kiss in cheek.
In three o they proved have closest Belarusian the TRC.
Despite doubts, Andrei as something took their in further movement — already to border Belarus and here is, now still and found familiar, as he himself put it "on Skype."
— Andrew, is happy to see, what Faith you works on border of last dictatorship Europe?
— Destino? — Andrei inherited an economic. — No, daughter podruzh. Good old hat won educational tour in Budapest and here is, clear cutting chain nevezeniy: We have no their, tour already translated vizovo-academic.
— The poor little ones. Listen, and have us on military jet OSCE seats many, — girl cunningly smiled. — Only as. Getting you out, but if you skillful extreme snowboarders.
— We — Russians: Without sports — nowhere.
Jet and truth proved spacious, flew quickly. Andrei and Veronica could not Registan from each other and, on happy eyes girls not it is difficult was be guessing where about its regard. Andrei melt soon in rays this magneticheskogo glance and gradually forget himself. By the end of by air our guide terminally melted and nesmelo addressed our group:
— Guys, I perhaps you'll leave, in the Czech Republic have Veronika problems, and Hungary already here, minutes` until of Budapest, there embassy, you after all adults already.

***

To wane we sat across in airport of Budapest. Red-Golden rays commentators the sky on-its very special, but not this pleased its the Light:
— you represent, cave just in some sixty kilometers to to southeastern! Less hours!
— Euro something have us not had stolen?!
— No, thank god, — drama voice Irwin.
Immediately with air terminal we took travel taxi. On highway, on speed above a hundred kilometers twilight would still were coming after us. Recent rays sun, recent paint decline of disappeared even before, as we has scaled back on secondary a path. Here taxi became slip, but some as, even before offensive night, pulled up to governing-vast kempingu.
— Yes modicum erected tents with a not power, here Ischu, — been happy about Max, deconstructing from aaaaaeieea bags.
The sky darkened slowly, perhaps too sluggish, rather this force habits after a long winters: Bam and twilight, moment and night. Alex looked on clock, the switch showed almost seven.
— First day Spring. — he was smiling,’s World. She, unlike rest, went directly to prigorku, on which was headquartered cave. Many thousands of years ago in the array dangerous cliffs soft, docile, life-renewing water, istochiv granite from within, a these years, and look the, a strange, youthful girl commanded in their darkness.
— Hey, you far?! — Alex not is sustained and members got the Light.
For him was reaching Max, next — Irwin.
Globe caught up with only have the caves. She teetered, frozen, in paired steps from entry.
— Besstrastnoe, first day Spring, the sun still light up the the sky the latest rays, perhaps, although would somewhere there in space. Miracles.
Girl entered cave. Strange electric have some veering ahead, as if specifying path. They excellent very close spellbound by froze, viewing unknown phenomenon.
— you erected tents borrow chase? And the surrender forgotten, — in impeccable Russian was asked obey.
Seller from there is more than one stood, zagorazhivaya entry. Max At Chabysh 2005, apparently take From left money and things. Gromykhnulo, a strange mist but / surrounding, Wall the whether Netanyahu, then whether was the. Their all five're being pulled by.
When Alex wake them, the rest came in themselves, World same teetered have Wall and something quietly hear from, as this girl's a robot.
— . This should not was be, all differently. Will happen.
— What, that? — Max grapple were holding back, when seizing for shoulders down my old classmate, wasn that not was shaking down its as doll.
— Miracles. I she has dreamed help girlfriend who, Olga, after all in directory stated, that the water in this a cave curative, if to garner in first day Spring.
— That it as! — lost ground, as if opomnivshis, just yelled, Max.
— I she has dreamed help.
— . Here is why you fewer all us borrow — without of lasting guys not going to do is pass on paranormal a cave.
All as on team look on Irwin's, which as times adjusted the lens.
— And still such a smart-ass bring my slipper, — set them off hands Max.
— Nu you, its robust guy, tone open Gabay, loudness oneself, — khokhotnul seller.
Max choked for sure from indignation, but why something nothing not said, perhaps him simply lacked words. And can high, athletic, with a strong mournfully guy acted sedative functions.
Here slew still in several places to the surface goes. And guys hope shelled for alone, maximum, three days. This after all cleanest a matter of national importance, pre-rounds here every day. Air enough, erected tents there is, water find, from hunger die not asking.
— A who pre-rounds makes, — Max quickly took themselves in hands.
— ya And still previous my.
—. Similarly, the? — suspicious squint Alex on seller of. The wanted to to answer, but his totally interrupted you World:
— 1425 should be source of, — she come to her senses girl, — first day, after all.
Guy from there is more than one smiled at.
— We today day polled, — held out he a small bubble. — When've been passed over, on you. Me Jaromir name is.
Of light pressed tare to breast and whispered:
— Thanks.

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That remained — ready to work and defense.
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A he was July 1945 — first day Spring. And a fresh wind I'm blowing in raspakhnutoe window. The clean the sky realizing innocence polygons cities, who was playing along on the sun snow — providing imparting whiteness.
"About than further write, about than conceive in day, when nature revives? Of course about love! Only about it, to it, for it. And still can be about light of. And poets and gurus live, musicians, couples — all value this time year. Winter of plummeting has, remained its the shadows. Snow, ('s notice stop not need a) familiar from crystal.
Has come 1 March.
Sunday. Sunny. Fresh. It's a bit frosty. Renewal. (Either to continue a series of-case "lively", either to remove)
In such a weather want gulyat with favorite a, has improved greatly for hands, and even more (dashes) look in window on Endless light and was blue the sky. Seems ('s notice stop) moment valuation ('s notice stop) and actions not will.
But clock ticking. All is changing — (the colon, not dashes) will come night, will ignite fires of. Gold sun lose silver Moon Illusion. And until — noon, equilibrium: And in psyche, and in nature. "
Point reliance wasalternatives. Alex made record in diary and, amazing from-for the table, became aggregate in a path.
Early morning and weekend, seemed (dashes or's notice stop)all commands to rest. Activist or sozertsatelnomu, (point) But on fact,far shelter itself from concerns? If you not Alexander developer WorldForge, then vanity gets and in output. Why they fell in these sporadic holidays precisely spring? Could would the summer will go in exotic countries type Thailand’s or, even better ('s notice stop) in the country Russia.

Of light leapt up, jumped so, that chair, for which(on which) she sat, fell on gender.

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Aside from mistakes / proofreading, there is moments in the text, which, too, not poorly would worked out. For example:
Of light notorious smiled. She was very good, and still, very lucky: Win educational tour in Hungary not everyone manages. And here quarantine: Dash: Lucky is obtained them all. Unfortunately, good heart of not promotes public popularity in our days — had to to invite to take boys, have Svetki not was girlfriends, except — it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. In general, girl she an honest not without idefiks in anybody, but ????? must be dream. Even strange, that Alex fell in love in it. Him constantly seemed, that feelings, covered most his — 're unbelievable dream, that such world, even slightly a strange in his positive sineglazka not for him, but glance deflecting could not and to abandon trip, too, not managed to.

In this paragraph is missing in narratives logic. From sad smiles the transition to a lack of friends and, as conclusion — girl she an honest. Regularly in paragraph of hectic nameshany raze not associated proposals, thought where it jumps with one on another. Worse not will become, if field their in the certain logical order:

Of light notorious smiled. Even strange, that Alex fell in love in it. Him constantly seemed, that feelings, covered most his — 're unbelievable dream, that such world, even slightly a strange in his positive sineglazka not for him, but glance deflecting could not and to abandon trip, too, not managed to. This she won educational tour in Hungary. And here quarantine: Dash: Lucky is obtained them all. Have Svetki not was girlfriends, except — it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. Had to to invite to take boys.

This simply example, as can be done the text more readable))

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Mikhail, a revised version of prikreplyay in the first message alongside the first option, to forumchane saw not only the first option (not all same will entire branch conceptual program, can not see)


Is reformed, in terms of location text and punctuation. Pick up volumes K couple of-top three days on delay the, proofreading in terms of logic and interactions proposals.
Huge thank you for to revive a, the text is improving squarely on the eyes of.
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A he was July 1945 — first day Spring. And a fresh wind pute in raspakhnutoe window. The clean the sky realizing innocence polygons cities, who was playing along on the sun snow — providing imparting whiteness.
"About than further write, about than conceive in day, when nature of the revives? Of course about love! Only about it, to it, for it. And poets and gurus live, musicians, couples — all value this time year, after all largely it symbolizes triumph feelings and life.— triumph feelings — not the most true to phrase, increasingly same feelings accented different and not always affirmative) I think, better to: Symbolizes triumph life, bright palette feelings (for example)

Point reliance. Alex made record in diary and, amazing from-for the table, became aggregate in a path.
Early morning and weekend, seemed, allcommands (possess) to rest. Activist or sozertsatelnomu. But far shelter itself from concerns? If you not Alexander software developer WorldForge today announces, then vanity gets and in output. Why he exploded in these sporadic holidays spring? — here not very understandable about what best that speech, and "why" not to community. Perefraziruem: And where his bears in these sporadic spring demonstrated holidays?

And here quarantine: Dash: Lucky is obtained them all. Have Svetki not was girlfriends, except — (dashes need not) it's a bit bleak-gotichnoy Olha, and the kind got a headache. Had to to invite to take boys.

Alexei very feared admitand so decided to minimally communicate with perfect. (Here not very true to phrase, Alexei not recognition fears, and to issue their feelings. So the right thing would have write: Alexey very feared as something show their feelings)

Ah and continuation of can be boldly conjuring up — little whether that there in paranormal something a cave can happen, until guys hope in a space suit)

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Thank you, that're helping, Lee. The text becomes better and better.
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Incidentally about the flask with water) If you saw pristrelku synapses under the leadership Jerzy, then can, too, participate in this undertaking, entering continuation of in framework project
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Many run idea, Lee. Stuck. (Not for good reason same more wrote)
Drakon v palto, an excellent advice, will try correct the beginning.
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Mikhail, I so and not understood, that this was in fact)
In fix here fiction? In past of?
Understood only. That the author, och. It seems, strongly in love with)) This is well!
But fiction there is no — this poorly!

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ABRAKADABR, you fully rights — d expand the text.
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Revised and expanded the text. Ready for further like hearing from.
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World crying on were marginalized, in metres three hundredstood dymyaschiy NEFAZ, mood have all was it's a lousy. (In metres, 300)

In this passage need reverse jobs proposals, otherwise not understandable, that and with whom happening:
— Greetings!
— Veronica, as you here.
Girl and Andrei zhemanno The mayor of New Springfield one a kiss in cheek.
In three o they proved have closest Belarusian the TRC.
Despite doubts, Andrei as something took their in further movement — already to border Belarus. And now still and found familiar, as he himself put it "on Skype."
(here is with this should begin narrative in this fragment history, simply reschedule finish selected higher dialogue Andrei and girlfriends)
— Andrew, is happy to see, what Faith you works on border of last dictatorship Europe?
— Destino? — Andrei inherited an economic. — No, daughter good old hat won educational tour in Budapest and here is, clear cutting chain nevezeniy: We have no their, tour already translated vizovo-academic.
— The poor little ones. Listen, and have us on military jet OSCE seats many, — girl cunningly smiled. — Only as. Getting you out, but if you skillful extreme snowboarders.
— We — Russians: Without sports — nowhere.
Jet and truth proved spacious, flew quickly. Andrei and Veronica could not Registan from each other and, on happy eyes girls not it is difficult was be guessing where about its regard. Andrei melt soon in rays this magneticheskogo glance and gradually forget himself. By the end of by air our guide terminally melted and, nesmelo addressed us:
— Guys, I you'll leave, in the Czech Republic have Veronika problems, and Hungary already here, minutes` until of Budapest, there embassy, you after all adults already.

A here narrative from faces author suddenly is shifting on from faces "we", need correct, because forth on transcript such a there is no.
To wane wesat across in airport of Budapest. Red-Golden rays commentators the sky on-its very special, but not this pleased its the Light:
— you represent, cave just in some sixty kilometers to to southeastern! Less hours!
— Euro something have us not had stolen?!
— No, thank god, — drama voice Irwin.
Immediately with air terminal wetook travel taxi. — and further himself other this the fragment, correct)

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The text became still stated. Thank you huge, Lee. Ready for additional criticized.
With respect.

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Greater part of text I would's got it backwards, remade. Explain to all nuances for times me difficult. Far easier lead woodgrain its imkhoshnyy example. But far not everyone author to Italian tastes such "intervention."

Last edited by Вжик (Dec 18 2015 09:39:16)

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About than conversation — example in studio.
Has broken narrative on two parts of for convenience critics.

Last edited by Михаил Ди (Dec 19 2015 10:57:46)

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Then will imkhi necessarily, but need time.
Incidentally, theme milk suppliers can have and munusy. Perhaps all will have then dramatically to change.

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Need time — not question. I himself still'm honing narrative, according to logic previous, very helping councils, reservations and critic.
Yes on flasks something as something not zamakhivayus, but if need to to change — means need to.

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