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Pristrelka 74 Fatah-Morgana and other mirages

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Until attention majority forums is focused on LitRPG, propose a pristrelochku not in this talent,)

ThemeMirage, illusion
This can be mirages as physical phenomena, so and events in life MOLDOVA, and can and philosophy about our entity... in a whole) At choice authors)
Compulsory condition — MOLDOVA not knows, that before him Mirage? Until final confirming stories with
And here is somehow will the endgame — bedaogorchenierazocharovanie or schasteradost — to decide participants this wouldn
If there is wishing to — leave the applications)

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Am running.)

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Ah and will announce start, perhaps) If still there is wishing to — join! There is no — then tickles duelka "Kolya against Lilly)

So, texts in strained 10 tyr! Await the until Saturday (12 September) 23.00 on Moscowme in BOS!

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I, too, stuck.

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Gladly illustrate public pristrelochnye work participants this arrangements in numbers — two) Of course, theme with one hand not simple, and with the other — gives opportunity devise interesting scenes and sporadic history. Am asking forums assess, how managed participants cope with meet the task and who of them deserve to I.D. himself winner in this a small intellectual battle))

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One hot mission year-old on the morning Angela myself don as child, while dancing in cloud ionized the dust, izvergaemoy huge my watering can, zavisshey over its head. Fences Angela already watered and not survived from the temptation a bit keep cool and admire rainbows.
By the still rakott antigravov, backed down the watering can in the air, interrupted melodic can handbells and Angela with curiosity looked out on streets. Along the streets ieue advertising “com in the form of a cloud. From a cloud danglingoff swings, with vyunkom and his flowers, zvenevshie in different key, ``crisis enchanting a melody. Overlooking the glance Angela, tiny little girl, unafraid, kachavshayasya on swings, threw her Jazz (health and and in the air zaplyasala rainbow the writing: “your the best choice! Fatah – Morgana! We do mirages reality! ” ?ysteinsson has turned into a the ball gologrammnoy exile, life stopped there in anticipation decisions client. Angela in love, but “com its are interested and she activated its information communicator, dunuv on wrist right-wing hands. Little girl, unafraid happily zakhlopala in hands and the ball jumped into it in tattooed lace stripes, mignuvshuyu in admission standards. Angela still times and I looked at a new model the CSM – its iTatu, modicum and cost of rabid money, was very handsome and not US sleep, as previous model.
These same on the evening it decided to visit virtual Music “Fatah – Morgana's ” where, to its the surprise of, saw only the lawn with a unicorn. But, later second, to it cover flew the familiar little girl, unafraid, and rassypaya lace krylyshkami glimmering dust, told the next: Music sold luxury goods, paintings, furniture, all on one to an intern!
— Client chooses design primary. For example you love still lifes George W. Lens. Last week you browsed their twenty-four times. Qualitative replicates would cost you not less, than thirty two an intern in the latest data statistics. Have us same she will cost only one intern. Only one and no one not know the difference our Mirage? From of the original. Term services embedded batteries counts on five hundred years. The first Made to Order for free!
Passed promised half an hour of exercise and on lawn before home already stood high the big dark-haired courier with picture, of a packed in cocoon forceful field.
— Hello, firm “Fatah-Morgana ” thanks you for Made to Order, — said courier, clearly win by TKO – We let us are happy for report about our shoulders of a product.
— “A he cute ”, — thought Angela, confirming delivering paintings, —“ newcomer, immediately in sight, here is how voice's flipping out. Need to put him Leake for work ”
— How you name is? Asked a contact in she – I want you Favoriting.
— Patrick. – responded guy and drifting in shy smile. His prostovatoe, nice face National Drug Control Policy, becoming incredibly similar on known actor O’'Brien, which fed the erotic dreams Angela the entire the latest month. Heart of Angela rasteklos on body warm wave of, leaving on retailing place delightful hollowness.
Patrick remained on dinner. Then still on one dinner. Then on dinner and breakfast. Angela was happy nowadays. Just for several interns she graced its bedroom in-style an urban mimic and've been living love with an admirable guy, lying down on luxurious bed with cover.
“We still machine buy ”, — kind of sleepy thought she, as suddenly the easy the vibrancy iTatu forced its look at bracelet, svetivshiysya disturbing red light. There are strong message forced its is angry with pomorschitsya – again “electronic tippets ”, already the second for year! This puzzling atmospheric phenomenon, usually about ten kilometers in diameter, instantaneously was dry all electricity, until his not raspylyala weather reports. And “tippets ” already was alongside its home.
Angela cautiously, to not wake up Patrick, has left with bed and quickly withdrew on cuisine. There were stored candles and real matches. ‘ This as helpful sometimes telling romantic the evening love. ” – thought: What that smile, Angela and in this moment pogas light.
In utter darkness and s Angela in haste ignited the all ten candelsticks. The darkness scarecrows its, and if would candelsticks was twenty-or thirty she ignited the would and their, too,. Forcing a tray opponent holding Angela, entered bedroom. And slightly not dropped candles on gender, stunned which are spectacle:
There, where teetered pretty Gotico with two pufikami now gromozdilsya prodavlennyy sofa and raznokalibernye old chairs. Bed with cover has turned into a brute pillar from as. Cupboard, inscription miracle red fruit, proved blunt and tacky legally. Hands Angela were shaking, when she used... to make candles all to new and new subjects, so voskhischavshim its before! “I live on pile debris. ” – with desperation thought Angela. –“ What malware likes! Need to show Patrick ”
She has drawn to bed, but launched light illumined face but then it rights. This was not Patrick! Angela screamed, and close face hands. In bed, that so much times had ever warmed heat loving tel, lay thin ” ordinary-looking helpful, almost teenager. In dream he had unveiled his mouth, the lower jaw my chew hangs down and were are visible small her teeth. In longest personified by with broad its nose not was nothing comparable on Patrick!
Candles raskatilis on brute vytertoy rag tested positive for, the former Persian the carpet. TECK wax, the fire have burned in dangerous neighborhood from svisavshey until gender shoddy sheets, but Angela was would still – its heart of lasted for much brighter from pain losing.
For electricity.

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It was long. Although, not so, how you can to imagine. Time after all, too, relatively. And "long" ????? its.
Existed, and can and now there is, the world, name which not software. And can and not have come up with his even, name something, and can forgotten, for I. And lived all there in world and consent. Every with childhood knew, for what appeared on light, yes that for goal have him in life. Because several issues philosophical ("in than sense life?", yes, "for what we here?") no one and not knew. And the world was a good, small and cozy. As warm comfy hut in the forest, during storm.
At times his attended "run", as is nicknamed their inhabitants puny world. Some of flowing remained, prelschennye goods, that could get. Population was malochislennym, because the natives themselves pursued the moreover, who can take place one of them. But happened this extremely rarely.
Once, a small world decided to to visit upon. Glorified by this personality its infinite wisdom of and common mind. Not vivid, as greeted costly guest inhabitants, decided ambush him are a good reception, yes opportunity to communicate with the local population. Maverick was would still, as his would face, because he a bit povorchav, agreed.
On central Square, among dirt and grass, installed a small ring. To designated time, to Tahrir have become pulled human their snake in their cage, as mere, deserting in Lake. Or greater dirt-banked a puddle. And here is already gathered all wishing to, to if not to talk to the, then modicum see known in many worlds apart the Ranger,.
He soon seceded from a two-story kirpichnogo buildings the Soviets, and under location mid a rumble crowds, is rousing itself on creaky through the on ring. People polyurethane, look at celebrity, all views and thought were prolongation to Maverick.
— Greetings you, peaceful one and happy people! — has he spoken he vozdev hands to heavens. From crowds I heard more sounds approval, someone even shouted grapple heard: "And you Hi, it!".
— A why happy something? And that this such? — asked SlLENCED feminine voice.
— you happy friends, because much not know. In a large knowledge, a large sadness. You same as chicks in compact, as children, for whom the world can be limited to a hole in it in pododeyalnike. And you happy, because know for what you needs to live. — upon weathered a small pausing and looked around the living faces inherent. Some expressed his brooding, some misunderstanding, were among them and malicious. But understanding of and nods approval he not beheld. — you live in his small and cosy world, which bypass side the misery of. You not see difference inter each other, because identical, and yes equally. You nothing not decide, not slide complex decisions and you happy.
Crowd conducted my reporting. Them never talked truth. They were amazed. But have all speech the Ranger, caused different feelings. As such obvious things, could not come them in head before? As he dare to speak about them so?
— A what same you himself cattin 'on worlds, not finding seats? — Uh-huh. yell him, under a celebratory a rumble. Here is he, the argument, from which can be build lzheoboronu in anybody, having missed words known sage through conventional filter in brain, and having understood their so, as need to. As need to them, to not to start thinking and become unhappy.
— My the world always with me, — he were displaced by hand breast, — and I not know for what I quot. Traveling, I try find answers. But always find only new questions. Your the world — reflection you. Witness around, — upon slowly slewed round around its axis, — you live in twin homes. Carry same clothes. You as of cogs one mechanism. And after all of cogs, albeit necessary, but easily is replaceable and not are unique. After themselves, you leave only political in a large mechanism, that preoccupy your descendants. The entire your life — mirage. Illusion.
— Ah you ‘ Some Harley Street quack! — crowd vzrevela, swayed mass before fun pedestal, too. — A ah went ??? ?? ? ?! We you with the entire soul of adopted, and you!
— Nobody likes truth, — seeking to out-shout vicious a rumble, loudly delivered upon, — and you lacked on long! I leaving, but wasn this something will change?
He gone down with pushed out, and under grand vituperative sound, went to kirpichnomu building. Leapfrogged ahead greater a puddle before entrance, that browser displayed results quickly forsirovala "vodomerka", leaving after themselves divergent micro waves traces. Them cannot be know truth.
Almost have the most entry, his overtaken guy, in zamusolennom jumpsuit.
— upon wait! And that OK such life-then? Explain it to me!
— This is complex question. Or same contrary — too simple. I not will be able explain you, but stuck show. The, as she goes, its for. See, — he were on grass, took in hand cool it was a twig, and gets sketch directly in podsykhayuschey dirt, on Bank pools. Painted circle. — Imagine that this the world. Your the world. And here is this, — he've circled the resulted Saver, unlevel framed, — life. Worlds can be many — around, within. They can exist or can be invented. Life, she as would obtekaet these Worlds, only of the corner of touching their. As water, which not flowing under the reclining stumbling. To see life, needs to escape from world, there, where its flows so strong, that can kill unaccustomed rights. When suddenly on its small the world with hand, don how he puny is, how is worthless his indicate ideals and rules. How incomplete mechanism. How he not is center just, the more life. This virtually impossible recognize Sitting within. But there is still one thing — itself man and there is concentrating vital energy. In most cases she takes wasted. Even not is ablaze — smoldering, for order to worked mechanism. Vintikam simply lulled, that they Meccano screws, and those happy that meet its purpose. But wasn this life?
— A that same then.
— Don’t reinforcing forces. As I and spoke, the search for answers only will lead to new issues. Simply their own and You should recognize. And I necessarily return. Although would sake of you. After all means, I not for good reason came here, times you wondered. But warn immediately — except problems, awareness you will not bring nothing. Whether ready to this. And I do. Me still much need to figure.

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Uffda, something not go critics work assess. Forumchane, ow!

Perhaps, 'll spit it out then I:

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Fatah Morgana
Interesting history. Zazhmurivshis on mistakes, which, of course, not difficult correct, to focus a on marriage. Think, in this case the author for good reason still in really the early confirming stories with entitled firms "Fatah Morgana" made reader hint, than likely will end history. If would vysheoznachennaya kantora named on Different, then until denouement survivor some pristine scheming and to read became would more interesting) But even in such a the form of well troops is work.

Mirages
Again same, zazhmurivshis on mistakes) Yes, the author tried to not simply entertain reader interesting history, but and communicate some a complex philosophical thought, that in principle almost managed (all same test need doshlifovat, clean a bit and finalize an the endgame, to the main idea not wandered off in abundance an extra $words.

What same narrative won? 'm fixin give preference the or the other work and as always the entire soul of for a draw) I hope, that still anyone from critics all same will leave its opinion about data texts)

Authors recommend after the end of the buy out extricate their narratives in criticism and bring texts until luster) MA – It can be, that the result your work will become from falling your stories in journal "Elephant"))

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The first narrative immediately summoned enlightened image Iyona the Pacific — ah the so. If the author not read “the Futurological Congress ”, then hard quartet the plot and Triad for enforcement. If read. Splagiatit can be was and poizyaschney.
The second — parable and there is parable. Thousands of their — and if this told it beautifully from souls, then quartet for excellent impulses and quartet with’for enforcement.

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And I'll trade you everything voice for the first narrative. Very me grassroots. The author brilliant! The second, too, good, but there there is over than tinker.

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Fatah Morgana

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That's original about material causes. For you are not putting buy on wrappers!

Mirages

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Don’t the narrative, vast in a parable, not the parable, not has appreciated until confirming stories with.

The first me grassroots more, yes and to topic all same closer.

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Старенький кряхтельник wrote:

If the author not read “the Futurological Congress ”,

Honest word — the author never read “the Futurological Congress ”, but will seek now this gap fill.
Me not very close psychology glamour girls, addicted on in shops, had to write on example one old hat :) But recast unambiguously need to.

Марина wrote:

A I'll trade you everything voice for the first narrative. Very me grassroots. The author brilliant!

Drakon v palto wrote:

That's original about material causes. For you are not putting buy on wrappers!

Thank you for reviews and criticism!

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Fatah Morgana released more interesting his rival. Truth remained some questions and betray him, but in principle, tolerable. A bit't activating prevents mimimishki but, I so understand, this as times for describe events from faces girls-pripevochki. So that, normally.
Mirages — not the slightest bit interesting parable not western nothing new and simply not zatsepivshaya. Several times eiaee themselves on desire ?? couple of paragraphs. Author that "f."
In both novels are found mistakes and Alvarez. So that, in criticism and napilnichkm and nadfilchikom and nazhdachechkoy (pink!) and Russia of nozhnichkami (with strazikami).
Ah, yes pobedyatel.
Ah the first on order stronger and more interesting.
Authors luck))

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So, while turning a blind pristrelochku)
Winner becomes RikiTikiTavi with short novel "Fatah-Morgana"!
The winner Ur!
Present day, too, carries!
Both author, attention! Your creation need in finalization, so work and still times work over texts! Get him out in criticism and inviting them their history until fortune masterpieces))

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